Re: FN-FORUM Site Check

date posted 24th January 2001 22:13

OK

Home page: Computer games and consoles has an apostrophe in it (which it
shouldn't have)

Antiques and Collectables. I don't think we say Transportation Items in
the UK for things to do with transport. Transportation means shipping
off to Australia as a convict, (unless that is what you mean).

Computer Equipment: More apostrophe abuse in Digital cameras

Household Goods: The opposite ;-) Kid's clothes needs an apostrophe
(like kid's toys)

Registration page: Desired Password: (Not display on our site) should be
(not displayed on our site)
You don't include minimum length information for nickname and password,
although it is enforced

Privacy statement: When you register on our site you information is
stored in our database should be YOUR information

Terms & Conditions: maybe you need to say that by placing an ad you
agree to abide by the conditions, rather than you are asked to

you supply to use , in UK English is "supply FOR use"

...owner or agent acting on behalf of the sole owner and the ad contents
doesn't make sense ??AND the ad contents ?? perhaps of the ad contents

When replying to an *** try to arrange --word advert missing at ***. UK
English would be ..arrange FOR someone to accompany you. (or ask someone
to accompany you)

it's up to yourself should be "it's up to you" --no self

The use of within sounds clumsy (and American), just IN or ON as
appropriate would probably sound better.

Contacting: For regarding, use ABOUT throughout.

Advertising

An AND rather than an ampersand would be nicer for "your company & web
site"

OK, you can find the rest, I'm sure
HTH
Kathy


----- Original Message -----
From: "Andrew McIntyre" [EMAIL REMOVED]
To: [EMAIL REMOVED]
Sent: 24 January 2001 20:59
Subject: FN-FORUM Site Check


> Hi all, I'd appreciate input on the following site -
www.manchesterads.com
> It's a free classified site for Manchester etc.., I'm not really after
> design comments, just comments on spelling, wording etc..
> The script I'm using was very Americanised but I think I've replaced
most
> yank with manc :)
> I'm aware of the side ad bar not displaying in Netscape but I've
struggled
> enough with it to care now.
>
> Thanks for your input and the best comments can share the tenner I
just won
> on the lottery ;-)
>
> Andrew
>
> -----------------------------------------
> Andrew McIntyre
> Smack Internet
> [EMAIL REMOVED]
> www.smackinternet.co.uk
>