Re: FN-FORUM could you give your opinion please.

date posted 19th July 2001 18:00

Paul
Here are some typos and other points I've noticed:

General
You use "web site" and "website" on your site.

'About' section
1) Para 1 - "Put your business on the Web Fat Cat Design, situated in Bury
St. Edmunds in England, is the sole performance of Paul Cooklin" - "the sole
performance" is an odd way of saying "run by" or "owned by", if that is what
you mean. Why not simply "Put your business on the Web by using Fat Cat
Design, situated in Bury St. Edmunds in England, owned and run by Paul
Cooklin."
2) Para 2 - "Whether" and "if" in the same sentence is unnecessary. I
suggest "Whether your business is built upon tradition or pushing the bounds
of convention..."
3) Para 2 - "is anopportunity", a space is needed after "an"

'Services' section
'Bronze Cat' - "A Domain name of your choice (.co.uk / .com) Web Hosting for
one year Up to 400 words Up to 4 scanned images Watermark of your company
logo as a background Search Engine submission
1 E-mail account ( i.e. [EMAIL REMOVED] Additional pages and graphics
can be added as required" - I suggest that the layout here should follow
similar lists on this page, ie

"A Domain name of your choice (.co.uk / .com)
Web Hosting for one year
Up to 400 words
Up to 4 scanned images
Watermark of your company logo as a background Search Engine submission
1 E-mail account ( i.e. [EMAIL REMOVED]
Additional pages and graphics can be added as required"

'Hit Counters + Statistics' - "statistical analasys" should read
"statistical analysis"; "site referrers" - "site referrals"?; "search engine
referres" - "search engine referrals"

'Bespoke Design - Overview' - "we analyze you needs" - I suggest "we analyse
your needs"; "Animated GIF's" - I suggest "Animated GIFs"

Hope this helps

John

----- Original Message -----
From: "Paul Cooklin (egroups)" [EMAIL REMOVED]
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Sent: Thursday, July 19, 2001 11:34 AM
Subject: FN-FORUM could you give your opinion please.


Hello All,

I have been busy changing my site as I have some 'FREE' time. Would you be
kind and take a look. I am interested to hear about the overall look and
feel and if it looks proffessional. I made some changes to the colour and
from where Im sitting it looks good, but it's one of those things that you
wake up one day and wonder what you were thinking. I did wake up today and I
still like it.
Is there anything else you think I should add. I have left it alone for a
long while, and now I've started...I just can't stop.

Many thanks.

Paul.